Hand, Arms, and Heart

[Catherine]

my first stab at poetry, so I don't think it's very great... This was written for a friend. Any and all comments are welcome, as always!!

You walk down a path
Like everyone else
You feel so alone in the midst
of this crowd

But never forget
When you feel you can't stand
To walk anymore, just remember
the hands

The Hand in your right
Fills you with strength
The hands at your left, they will stay
'til the end


The troubles you face
You feel overwhelmed
They build up around you, they're pushing
you down

Your friends will be here
To comfort your tears
And His Arms will enfold you, dispelling
your fears

The Arms and the arms
Surround you with love
You can push on with the warmth
of their hug


You've a long life to live
Who knows what's ahead?
What you will do, who you'll be
'fore the end?

The hearts all around
They lift you in prayer
All through your life, they will always
be there

And His Heart is on fire
And guiding above
You can ne'er comprehend His unfath'mable
love
Unfath'mable Love

[jane]

oh wow Catherine...that was wonderful. it was smooth, and sounded like intelligent poetry, not dumb teenage sappy crap. really, its a great poem. I feel the warmth. there is definitely some warmth there. 8)

I like this line the best

And His Arms will enfold you, dispelling
your fears

and I really enjoyed all the 'tills and 'fores and shortened words. They made it seem...comfortably eloquent.

props.

[Catherine]

Oh Jane m'dear thank you very much.

[Liz]

Wow; I absolutely loved it, Catherine. I might as well just right "ditto" after Jane's post. Absolutely wow. Thanks for bringing a smile to my face!

[Brighitta]

Loved it! Smooth, elegant, loving!

[Catherine]

well thank you all very much. I am blushing and smiling so big right now.... you make me so happy. ;D

[subtlecollision]

That was awesome, Catherine. It had very good fluency. Not to mention I really like the title.

[Catherine]

thanks Nat ;D